Sorry, I’ve been neglecting this blog. I’ve been sick the past two days, and before that I was concentrating on Avatar. I’ve decided not to change the ending, after much agonizing over it, trying to find something better, something not so deus ex. After re-reading my critiques, I realized that only one person thought the ending was deus ex, out of about 10. Some others didn’t like it, but frankly, I don’t know a better way to end it. My original alternative ending was to bring back the game judge, but that was essentially also a deus ex ending. I couldn’t find anyway to end it well and not have…

Now that Avatar is done, I’m a bit confused about how to proceed. Should I incorporate the changes I made, revise totally, then look at the critiques, or look at the critiques, compile a list of things that need to change, change those, then revise the story totally over, or some recombination of above. I’m trying to figure out how to get the most done in the least amount of time, so I’m not running over material over and over. For both Blood 2 and Black Hole Son, I’ve been keeping a list of things that need to change in the next revision. I’m not sure if I plan to…

I finally got to revise Avatar. I figured I had to do it sometime, damn all the obstacles and time constraints. I managed to read it all at once, but I feel like I revised it wrong. I was trying to be a reader, but I feel like I scrutinized it too carefully and lost the reading flow. It went back to how I used to revise, but without adding anything in. It’s not a bad story. I feel like there’s a gem under here, but it’s buried in a bunch of dirt. My main complaint is that it feels like a fable for kids. It’s not complex enough, the…